نمونه نگارش آیلتس آکادمیک – ۳

 

نمونه نگارش آورده شده مربوط به نگارش اول آیلتس آکادمیک می باشد که در آن به تجزیه و تحلیل نمودار میله ای پرداخته شده است. در این نگارش (writing) آیلتس حداقل ۱۵۰ لغت را در مدت زمان ۲۰ دقیقه می بایست بنویسید.

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 (Report)

sample #3

You are advised to spend a maximum of 20 minutes on this task.
The graph below shows annual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some country. Write a report for a university tutor describing the information shown.
You should write at least 150 words.

The barograph describes the water usage for every year in some country in millions of cubic meters.

The water usage are shown in two trends , ground water and public supply. Fuel and textiles are the ones that uses the least water, 10 of public supply and 70 and 80 of ground water. Machinery are just the opposite of these two and has 10 of ground water and 100 of public supply.

Food/drinks, metal, paper and chemicals are all over 100 of ground water where chemicals peaks at dramatically 430. The highest number of water usage of public supplies also belongs to chemicals (240). Next on the list is food/drinks with 190, the others are under 100.

Overall, the chemical industry uses a lot more water than the rest of the industries both ground water and public supplies, and in general most industries use ground water by far more then public supplies.

This is a good report, the trends are correctly noticed. Suggested improvements: use units in addition to numbers (10 of what? Millions of cubic meters). Use more connective words to smoothly move from one paragraph to another. Pay attention to grammar, see comments.