نمونه نگارش آیلتس آکادمیک – ۱

 

نمونه نگارش آورده شده مربوط به نگارش اول آیلتس آکادمیک می باشد که در آن به تجزیه و تحلیل چارت پرداخته شده است. در این نگارش (writing) آیلتس حداقل ۱۵۰ لغت را در مدت زمان ۲۰ دقیقه می بایست بنویسید.

 

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 (Report)

sample #1

You are advised to spend a maximum of 20 minutes on this task.
The table below describes percentages of home schooled students in Some Country in 1999-2004. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.
You should write at least 150 words.

 This table shows homeschooled students in some country in year 1999-2004 in percentages.

The main trend is that all grades including kindergarten are growing for every year. Kindergarten started highest at 2.4 and ended highest at 2.9 percent with a constant increase. But grades 1-2 and grades 5-6 shows a little different trend, both starts at 1.5 percent in 1999 and declines a little bit in 2000. Both of them increased slowly in 2002 and both it holds that course to 2004 where grades 1-2 ends at 2.1 percent and grades 5-6 ends at 2.6 percent.

Grades 3-4 have a slow but steady growth through all six years. It starts at 1.6 percent in 1999 and increases 0.1 every year except in 2003 when it peaks up 0.2 percent. Grades 7-8 starts at 1.6 percent and stays there for three years until it rapidly rises up to 2.2 and peaks at 2.5 in 2004.

Overall, all grades including kindergarten has had a rise at roughly minimum 1 percent and more in 6 years.

This is a good report; here is how you can make it better: the coherence needs improvement, meaning the logical connection between sentences inside a paragraph and between paragraphs. Use more connective words (Furthermore, However, etc).

The groupings you’ve done are fine, but try to use more variations describing those statistics: use words such as numbers, figures, percentages, etc. The grammar and the spelling need some extra attention.